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托福独立写作中间段写法(二)

2014-09-04 09:04| 来源:环球托福

摘要: 托福写作对于学生来说,正确的备考方式是勤写,在不断的练习中将托福写作能力提高,在前面的文章内容中,环球托福老师已经初步讲解了托福独立写作中间段写法,下面就由环球托
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    托福写作对于学生来说,正确的备考方式是勤写,在不断的练习中将托福写作能力提高,在前面的文章内容中,环球托福老师已经初步讲解了托福独立写作中间段写法,下面就由环球托福黄维老师给考生带来托福独立写作中间段写法(二)
    用例子论证“失败是成功之母”
    无数同学会想到用“爱迪生常识很多次失败后才发现用无私作为灯泡的灯丝”的例子来论证。
    但是一些同学发现这句话里面很多单词不会拼写,于是在课堂上看到这样的写法:
    爱迪生不会写,写为:a famous person
    尝试很多次,到底多少次,这个细节也不会写,写为:many times
    钨丝不会写,写为:the most important part of 灯泡
    灯泡不会写,写为:the greatest invention
    最终的结果是写为了:a famous person tried many times to find the most important part of the greatest invention.
    毫无疑问这个例子是令人啼笑皆非的,因为没有细节。修改如下:
    Thomas edison tried over 1500 materials to find the right substance to serve as filament in his great invention, the light bulb. The notes he wrote about the research extend to 40 thousand pages. But rather than give up, Edison kept trying. Each failure taught him something new and helped him eventually figure out what kind of material was proper Edison’s experience teaches us that failure is simply part of the process that leads to success.
    举例子两步走
    第一步:找抽象词
    第二步:对抽象词加细节
    例子1:Advertisements vastly boost sales and profits of the manufacturers or service proveders.
    第一步:抽象词:advertisements以及 boost sales and profits
    第二步:加细节:抓住抽象词汇advertisements在例子部分构想, 某某公司实行了某某广告;抽象词汇boost sales and profits在例子部分构想,实现了什么具体的收益。
    Apple’s television advertising has been key to the renewal of Apple loyalty and excitement in the world. The Think Different campaign, launched in 1997, was a central factor in Apple’s recovery from financial difficulty, winning admiration for creativity as well as focused attention for new products.
    以上就是环球托福老师给考生总结的关于托福独立写作中间段写法(二),希望对考生的托福写作有所帮助。