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托福写作摆脱中式表达逻辑

2014-09-01 09:46| 来源:环球托福

摘要: 托福写作不要中式表达。对很多中国托福考生来说,写作实际上是个翻译过程,如何把思想中的中文转化成现实中的英文是基础托福写作最关心的问题,也是学生们首要应该解决的问题
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    托福写作不要中式表达。对很多中国托福考生来说,写作实际上是个翻译过程,如何把思想中的中文转化成现实中的英文是基础托福写作最关心的问题,也是学生们首要应该解决的问题。下面,上海环球托福小编整理有关托福写作如何摆脱中式表达逻辑的分析,希望对各位考生有所启发。
 
    学生们只有把高质量的基础砖瓦填充到精心设计的逻辑框架中,才能搭建成最终的托福高分作文!
  
    句子完美,用词到位,分数自然就会高,但是我们的学生受思维定式的影响,往往在新托福写作中运用的是中国式英语,英语和汉语表达有区别,如果在新托福写作中套汉语思维,就是中式化英语的表现。这只能使文章语言蹩脚、冗赘。所以考生在平时阅读英语材料和练习写作时,要注意英语表达和汉语表达的差别,切忌在托福写作中 硬套汉语思维。
 
    1、Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best book knowledge acquisition then our society offers us the best surviving techniques in a hard way.
    Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge, then our society offers us the best method for acquiring common sense or “street smarts”.
    Agree to say that表达中式化,只需要agree that即可;the best book knowledge acquisition改为the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge(学校给我们提供了获取书本知识的最好方法)更为恰当 ,同样,后面的the best surviving techniques改为the best method for acquiring common sense...;加上street marks(街头智慧)给文章的托福词汇增添色彩。
  
    2、Original: They can spend more time studying education and communication to improve their role as a mother, wifes and daughter.
    Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, education themselves, in order to improve themselves in their roles as mothers, wives and daughters.
    原句中studying education and communication的说法中式化,不符合英语的表述,应该为studying,educating themselves。除了词语表达,此句中还存在其他问题,如名词单复数的使用:不是提高他们的角色,而 是提高他们自身以扮演好母亲角色。还有,女性不止一个人。很多人都在扮演母亲角色,role和mother应用复数,故将improve their role as a mother改为improve themselves in their roles as mother;同样,为保持一致,wife和daughter也可用复 数,原文中wife的复数写法有误,应该是wives。
 
    3、Original:If you can get the point of communication by watching TV,will you...?
    Revised:If one can learn about communicating from television,will you...?  
    原句的get the point of communication by watching TV表达不清,让人难以理解,应该是指“从电视上学习交际”:learn about communicating from television.  
    看到这些考生们肯定知道自己错在哪里了,同学们练习新托福写作时应多听一些外国本土的英语文章, 在托福写作考试中避免这样的错误出现。
 
    以上就是上海环球托福小编整理的有关托福写作如何摆脱中式逻辑的分析