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托福Tpo25写作解析

2014-10-21 14:54| 来源:环球托福

摘要: 下文带来Tpo25写作解析。
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  你是否同意以下说法:
  当今的年轻人没有付出足够的时间来帮助社区。
  使用具体的理由及例子来支持你的观点。

  接下来为大家介绍这道题目的背景:
  理解这个题目需要对美国的文化有一定了解,同时也要注意审题时候要从年轻人的角度出发来思考问题。
  对于美国人,尤其是学生来说,社区服务是必须参加的(service learning requirement),而且通常会有时间限制,比如至少达到40小时,不同学校对此要求不一样。学校也会给出活动的范围或者具体活动项目,如清扫公园、帮助孤寡老人等,并且会有相应的记录。这是大学申请的必要条件之一,对于学生的职业选择以及个人成长有很大的帮助。
  而对于中国学生来说,类似的活动可能比较有限,由此导致中国学生看到这个题目的时候有些迷茫,没有什么观点。从小受到父母宠爱、亲人关怀的中国孩子还没有形成一个“回报社会”的观念。此外,学习的高强度压力或者工作的繁重没有留给年轻人足够多的时间。

  然后讲一讲这类题目的写作思路:
  了解了题目背景存在的差别,我们就可以开始构思:
  1. 从学生角度出发,根据我们的自身情况就可以得知,我们大部分的时间都贡献给了在校学习,上课和作业占用了我们绝大部分的时间。因此我们就可以得出年轻人社区服务不够的第一个原因:
  孩子们的学习任务过重
  在具体展开的时候,我们可以提到社会强大的竞争压力、家长对于孩子的期望等背景问题,这些点不仅我们自己深有体会,同时也是托福写作考试中常用的分析角度。
  2. 其次,我们还可以说,这也是我们自身意识不够强导致的,而这种意识也是基于社会整体的,我们接受的教育和父母的言传身教都是这个问题形成的因素。从而得到第二个观点:
  缺乏社区服务意识

  以下附上TPO25独立写作题目原创的高分范文
  Young people nowadays are credited more than they can handle, both as the future of the world and the benchmark of social morals. They are overwhelmed by huge expectations to engage in numerous tasks from their parents and the society as a whole, therefore time is almost never enough for them. Helping the communities, among all the things, is no exception.
  Objectively, time is indeed far from sufficient for youth to engage in this kind of activities. From the primary school children to the working population, it is the learning and working that justifies their full time, especially in countries that prioritizes academic improvement. This is an idea that is instilled in their mind and ingrained with each passing day. Teachers in school and parents at home constantly give them an impression that an outstanding performance outweighs anything else and only in excelling others in academic study can they embrace a bright future and promising career. No wonder the importance of study dies hard and naturally other activities, ranging from helping the lonely aged to cleaning the road, are considered a distraction from their major task.
  At a deeper level, the concept or awareness of devotion may be lacking in the young’s mind. Brought up and considered as the prince or princess of their family, young people have already taken it for granted that contribution, either to their little family or the community, is not a necessity in their life and immerse in their individual world. This is partly because the parents misinterpret it in a way that children can get whatever they demand without consideration of others, let alone some return to the world they live in. Also in part the education system and the society plays no favorable role in molding a contributing atmosphere. In advocating and focusing on intellectual development and material success, they are actually conveying a perception that academic development and working achievement are the golden rule and destination. Then the innocent young, experiencing the strong criticism from the outside, still have to carry on with the heavy working burden. In contrast, the societies that put community service in a high position can witness the giving young people active participating in various activities for the needed. The society, in turn, can feel the warmheartedness and enthusiasm. Obama is a typical example, he repeatedly referred to his experience of serving his community and attributed his growth to the service in his first presidential campaign. This won him many votes and somehow reflects how much importance Americans attach to the community contribution. Additionally, community service is a requirement for applying for universities, pushing and encouraging the students to get involved.
  In conclusion, young people may not be so multi-tasking, but they are not the only one who are responsible for the insufficient contribution. The solution lies with the cooperation of the parents and the whole society, creating a sound atmosphere and raising their awareness from the very beginning.

  其实托福的作文要比雅思容易,托福的作文话题都是固定几类,不像雅思涉及面太广,所以不会让我们感到“措手不及”,它都是有信息的。同学们面对托福作文要放松心态,多阅读一下我上面给出的范文,平常自己多进行话题和背景知识积累,托福写作不会有太大问题。同时TPO25里体现的话题方向也是一种信号,大家可以多加参考。
 

TPO 25 综合文章范文


The reading passage explores the function of ancient vessels, and the professor's lecture is also about the same topic. Whereas, she contends that the arguments in reading are not convincing and the vessels could be utilized as battery in old ages, which conflict with reading's content. And in the speech, the professor uses three compelling reasons to support her position. 

First, the absence of metal wire mentioned in reading cannot be tenable proof. In the lecture, the professor claims that the vessels were discovered by local villagers, not archaeologists, when they excavated those ancient products, they had no awareness of careful observations. Therefore, those wires might be neglected and threw away, which means electric wires are supposed to exist before the discovery even though they were not found after experts came to the fields, which disproves its counterpart in reading passages. 

Second, even though it is true that the copper cylinders are look similar like Seleucia's, the professor asserts that it cannot be the evidence to identify the function of those later vessels. The early vessels might be served as book scrolls at the beginning, but later some inventors realized the addition of iron and liquid can produce electricity, which means the original function was adopted by later generation, and this part is obviously overlooked by reading passage. 

Third, the professor states that electricity could be useful for ancestors which weakens the argument made in reading. She points out that ancient people can use battery to prove the magic invisible power. The electric battery can produce slight current which could cause mind shock after people touched. Moreover, it can be the healing tool as well. When people feel painful, the shock of battery could release the feeling of ache.   

To sum up, the professor clearly pinpoints the weaknesses in the reading passages, and convincingly shows that the central argument in the reading, i.e., the function of vessel is not as electric battery, is specious.   

以上就是环球教育为考生总结的 托福Tpo25写作解析,希望对考生有所帮助。